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Posts : 7 Join date : 2016-07-01

Done. look again when possible http://fifthsanctum.com/character:lurtz

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Lurtz
Now Smokewraith ended up doing too little instead. XD The number on it needs to matter, so maybe make the bonus fractional of the rating, or if it's doing just the attack skill in particular, the duration could be something like half the roll instead of a flat 2. Keep in mind it could end up growing and doing more later on too.
Otherwise looking pretty good.

Posts : 7 Join date : 2016-07-01

Ok, I made some changes to smokewraith. Another look when possible would be appreciated Smile

http://fifthsanctum.com/character:lurtz

GM Posts : 73 Join date : 2016-06-22

Re: Lurtz

It has the problem of the rating not having any effect still, maybe have the duration be some fraction of the roll or have some way for the bonus to scale?

Posts : 16 Join date : 2016-07-13

Re: Kioku
Okay, time for take three. Totally changed the first ability. How's Bobby looking now?

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Lurtz
The point was that it needs to scale somehow with the power's rating instead of all being flat. +1 for a longer time based on roll, or a bonus based on rating for like 2-3 rounds (4 is too long for a flat duration). Just, the power's rating needs to matter, it can't be the same from 1 to 7.

Re: Bobby
I'd make that first power a Perception skill replacement too, if you wanted to, which would free up some skill points to go along with it letting them be in two places at once. It just seems a tiny touch on the weak side at present.

GM Posts : 73 Join date : 2016-06-22

Re: Lurtz
Talked to you, you changed some stuff. 1/2 approval.

Posts : 16 Join date : 2016-07-13

Did and done!

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Lurtz
I kind of think any bonus capable of lasting more than a few rounds can't afford to be more than +1... but then, the max roll for the power if we ignore crits is about 15, so that's still at most 5 rounds on a good roll at max rank, and 4 rounds on an average roll at max rank. It'll be on the strong side by then, but we can see how it works out for now.
Fine, approved.

Re: Bobby
I want to see the exact words "Perception skill replacement" in that power description.

Posts : 16 Join date : 2016-07-13

Done and did!

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Bobby
1/2 approval.

Posts : 21 Join date : 2016-07-12

Posting again... Again. Fixed the toughness skill and the flavor power was placed with Decay and Infestation. Already has one approval stamp. http://fifthsanctum.com/character:tilen

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Tilen
Toughness isn't exclusively ranged, don't say that on it.
Half approval maintained.

Posts : 21 Join date : 2016-07-12

Toughness reverted, yes I wanted blanket defense. http://fifthsanctum.com/character:tilen

GM Posts : 73 Join date : 2016-06-22

Re: Tilen
Approved!

GM Posts : 73 Join date : 2016-06-22

Re:
Bobby approved too~

Posts : 21 Join date : 2016-07-12

I finished this character ahhhh: http://fifthsanctum.com/character:derahnda-nevayuh

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Derahnda
Almost got it in one this time, just the second ability, "Uzara's Power" is too weak; just doing one thing, and that one thing being a touch attack is never nearly enough, especially since skills do attacks better early on.

Posts : 21 Join date : 2016-07-12

Gave 'Uzara's Power' extra use. Fixed grammar in some areas. http://fifthsanctum.com/character:derahnda-nevayuh

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Derahnda
Alright, that's a good bit better!
Hmmm.... 1/2 approval.

GM Posts : 73 Join date : 2016-06-22

Re: Derahnda
I'm going to assume that she can just summon the chain and doesn't have to attack with it (Because using some 'god's' powers to just get an easy-to-access rope is funny to me) and that it can be used to hit intangible foes (since it's ethereal already) and with those assumptions I'll give it 1/2 approval.

GM Posts : 73 Join date : 2016-06-22

annnd Kio beat me to the punch. That's full approval.

Posts : 17 Join date : 2016-06-23

BAM NEW CHARACTER! http://fifthsanctum.com/character:kira-robinson

GM Posts : 94 Join date : 2016-06-17 Age : 35

Re: Kira
Discussed and worked through stuff.
Everything looks good besides background maaaaybe conflicting with some things, but we'll see about that later.
Makes me very annoyed and sad, because for over a year it's been established canon that Aiko made the first ever SAI in the world. :-\
Even so... ~~1/2 approval I guess.~~ I mean... the character is good and everything fits except the history, the history should be both impossible (to make an SAI with like, pre-2030s tech level without the powers to help) and conflicts with the pre-existing state of things... but I feel terrible denying it just because of... yeah. I don't know. I don't feel like I can approve or refuse this or anything because the mechanics are good, but the history connection is just too personal.

GM Posts : 73 Join date : 2016-06-22

Re: Kira
I'm not going to give it full approval, since it was established in canon that Aiko made the first sentient AI and this conflicts with that.